Is this story good? Please read below?!?

I'm a little confused on who everyone is. I her name Kara or Sheana? I think you might want slow the pace of the story a little but it's kind of interesting. I wouldn't have them say mean or use the word scoff. They just don't fit.on so don't say soooooo have her say so then use a adjective. You have to consider there age and if there sluffers how smart the are with their english. Your stories fine though.