Lorette Niece
Thursday, August 11, 2011
Can you please critique my writing?
You need to make your sentences longer. And stop using 'I'. So what if she's a mentally ill child? Do they have to use the word 'I' a thousand times a day? It's a bad style. If it doesn't work in first person, change it to third.
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