Lorette Niece
Tuesday, August 2, 2011
How can I make this paragraph better?
Honestly I thought the paragraph was good, it had many details and kept on making me think who she is. When I read the last sentence I want to read more immediately so you caught your audiences attention (well mine at least) Well Done!
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